Micro Fiction – Bid for Freedom

This is my attempt at micro fiction, let me know what you think. I wrote the long version then tried to get all the points across including plot in under 250 words (I did it in 220).

He eased the window open, just enough to squeeze through, then flung his bag out and lowered himself gently, dreeping the last few inches to the ground. He didn’t want to be caught like the last time. They’d increased the security but he had it sussed.

He waited, listening for an alarm. Silence. He picked up the bag and made his way across the field to the copse, looking back to check no-one was following. He ran on to the clearing. The car was there. Unlocked. Opening the door he slid in. A quick fiddle with the wires and it revved into life. He smiled thinking about Lucy. He checked his watch.

***

The peal of the telephone cut into the silent darkness. She looked at the clock. 3 a.m.? Something’s wrong. She rubbed her brow and let out a defeated sigh as she replaced the receiver.

She tried not to waken Joe as she gathered her things together. He stirred, then sat up, squinting at the clock.

“You were going to leave without telling me Lucy?”

She leaned back against the door.

“I thought I’d let you sleep.”

He was out of the bed, coming towards her.

“It’s him again, isn’t it?”

She nodded, looking away.

“Yes it was the Care Home,” she sighed. “Dad’s escaped again.”

© Allison Hope 31 March 2016

 

6 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Trackback: Micro Fiction – Bid for Freedom | Allychat's Blog - a lighter look at life
  2. Elle Knowles
    Jun 14, 2018 @ 15:31:12

    Microfiction sounds appealing Ally. The beginning of some great fiction! ~Elle

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  3. Elle Knowles
    Jun 14, 2018 @ 15:37:03

    Reblogged this on Finding Myself Through Writing and commented:
    Ally’s back! And with some great micro fiction! Drop by her site to see for yourself…

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  4. myeccentricfriend
    Jun 14, 2018 @ 17:29:35

    I was holding my breath throughout, you created a feeling of suspense very quickly. Nice piece.

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  5. allychat
    Jun 16, 2018 @ 17:17:13

    Thanks Elle and my eccentric friend so glad to be back. I love writing fiction and hope to post more soon. Love your blogs – let’s keep blogging! X

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  6. myeccentricfriend
    Aug 09, 2020 @ 07:55:19

    I loved this, looking forward to more. Hint hint.

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